Madame Librarian ([info]taken_with_you) wrote,
@ 2006-08-17 22:50:00
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Fic: Beyond the Pale part 3/9 (L/V) NC-17
Beyond the Pale (3/9)
By: Madame Librarian
Rating: NC-17
Warnings: sex, language
Characters: Logan, Veronica, L/V
Word Count: 2660
Spoilers: nothing specific past mid-S2 or so, assuming L/V in established relationship.
A/N: Unfortunately, life has gotten in the way, which meant this part was a little long in coming. This part was all me, not sure how much [info]adelli will be contributing to the rest of the story. We did brainstorm it all together, though, so she is here in spirit. :-D
Links to : Part 1 & Part 2

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Logan drummed an erratic beat on the leather cushion of the steering wheel, staring up at the restored Victorian-style home across the street. The narrow roadway was lined with cars; light spilled from the open doorway as several party-goers egressed into the chilly night. Veronica was in the passenger seat, gazing longingly towards the house, which undoubtedly was warm because of a crackling fire and the combined body heat of fifty-some-odd people.

“Are we going to go in, or just sit here?” Veronica asked, after a long silent minute stretched into two, and then three. They'd already had this argument, when she first told him about the party the week before. He didn't want her going by herself, but he didn't necessarily want to attend with her, either. He'd gone out of his way to bribe her—even so far as promising the impossible—a home-made pasta dinner and hours of sex. Logan didn't know how to boil an egg, much less deliver freshly-prepared chicken cannelloni. But despite that, Veronica insisted that he was going to have to learn how to make nice with her friends sooner or later. Just the week before Veronica had exhibited an infinite reserve of patience when she and Logan had gone to the ballpark with Dick and Luke.

Logan took a sip from his hip flask and tucked it back into his pocket. He nodded at her to stay put, and then got out of the car before hurrying around to open Veronica's door for her. She took his hand as they walked swiftly across the rain-dampened street, their breath leaving thin vaporous trails in the night air.

When they pushed their way into the house, Logan gently unclasped his hand from hers and reached for the collar of her jacket. Before he could help her remove it, he was practically bowled out of the way by 230 pounds of brute muscle. Veronica's friend John had bounded down the stairs and was hugging her a little too enthusiastically, considering he'd just seen her that afternoon in their Constitutional Law class. John placed a loud, smacking kiss on her cheek.

“Calypso, glad you could make it,” he beamed, reaching for her coat. He stripped it off, then helped her unwind from her muffler. He tossed them at Logan, barely sparing a glance in his direction. He slung his arm over Veronica's shoulders and drug her towards the dining room. Veronica shot Logan an apologetic smile over her shoulder, and Logan gave her a small, resigned wave. He wasn't sure when this whole private-joke-nickname shit started, but he sure as hell wasn't happy about it.

The party was in full-swing and it was only a quarter after nine. The house had been refurbished beautifully, rich red carpet lined the stairs and hallways, while dark stained wood spanned the length of the larger rooms. A gold brocade wallpaper and mismatched furniture gave the renovated home a shabby chic appeal. Logan took his own coat off and wandered into the small, darkened parlour that was to the left of the foyer. He draped Veronica's coat over her purse, which he nestled into the crook of an armchair, and then tucked his own coat around hers protectively.

He pushed his sleeves up over his wrists as he meandered back into the main room, scoping out the small groups that were gathered around, chatting. Veronica's friends were known for their intellectual clambakes; everything about them screamed pretension. They had none of the opulence of his mother's grand soirees, but plenty of ego to go around. On the antique sideboard, Logan spied the usual smorgasbord: the cheese and fruit tray, the canape buffet, the vintage wine selection.

Logan watched as John presented Veronica with an unopened bottle of her favourite white wine, her answering smile was enchanting. She had only recently become comfortable having alcohol at parties, but never from an open bottle or cup, and never without someone she trusted there to monitor her. The wine was poured into delicate stem-ware and Logan didn't miss the fact that John's beefy hand brushed Veronica's as he pressed the glass into her palm. He gritted his teeth, but said nothing; his girlfriend would not appreciate a scene, no matter how justified.

Several small kegs sat on the rear patio, the TAs in the Political Science department had a friendly competition over who made the best home brew. Logan helped himself to a cup of a raspberry wheat beer and went to find a bare piece of wall to slouch against until Veronica was ready to leave. The staircase was now deserted, so he clambered up about halfway and plopped down, his back to the wall. The second floor of the house was dark, limiting guest traffic onto the top of the stairs where a second bathroom was located. Logan was shrouded in shadows as he watched the festivities below.

His fists clenched and every muscle in his body tightened when he saw John pawing at the small of Veronica's back like he owned her. She carefully extracted herself from his arm's reach, but it wasn't a minute gone by until he was crowding her again, gesticulating animatedly to the group that was gathered around them. Logan reined in his strength and looked away, desperately hanging on to his control.

John Pitcannon was the polar opposite of Logan Echolls. He had grown up on a farm in the midwest, had loving parents, six older brothers and one younger sister. He graduated valedictorian in a class of 54, and was awarded a full scholarship to Hearst when he scored a 1560 on his SATs. He was build like the broad side of a barn, over six feet tall and outweighed Logan by at least sixty pounds. He was handsome enough, Logan supposed, with a ruddy complexion and a ready smile.

From across the room, two of the guys from Veronica's International Law class were staring at him, stopping just short of pointing. His girlfriend was no longer within his line of sight and that worried Logan enough to take one last sip of his beer before hefting to his feet.

He trudged down the stairs and through the dining room, where he dodged several small clusters of people, standing on his toes, searching for that elusive splash of blond hair. He halted in his tracks when he heard his last name, and automatically tucked himself behind the door way that led from the dining room into the kitchen. He caught snatches of the discussion through the ramblings of the revelers surrounding him.

“...she can't possibly have a stimulating conversation with him... He barely graduated high school... the sex must be fantastic... what a loser...”

Logan's entire body was stretched taut, anger that he hadn't felt in almost a year bubbling just under the surface.

“Does he even go to school?”

“She says he's not the college type...”

Logan weaved his way through the door, brushing past Beverly, John's younger sister and the source of the gossip. Her naturally curly hair had been ironed straight for the occasion, but was starting to frizz. She abruptly closed her mouth when he sauntered past, but he nailed her with a hard glare.

When he finally found Veronica, his stomach clenched painfully. She was standing against the far wall of the breakfast nook, her arms crossed over her chest, her wine glass nowhere to be seen. John had one hand on the wall above her head, and he was leaning in closer. Their conversation looked quiet, intimate. Veronica caught sight of Logan just before he turned on his heel to go back the way he'd come in. He was halfway across the living room, headed for the front door when Veronica's hand slipped into his own.

He followed her reluctantly as she pulled him up the grand, sweeping staircase and then hustled him into the bathroom. As soon as the door closed behind her, she was in his arms, crawling up and locking her legs around his waist. He reciprocated instinctively, anchoring her so that she didn't fall, nipping at her lips and her chin hungrily. But even as she became more impassioned, and he turned her around and pressed her back against the door, he couldn't help the cancerous doubt that was blooming within him. Were the backbiting blowhards actually right about something? Was sex really the only thing he and Veronica shared?

“Make me yours,” she demanded, throwing her head back to expose her neck to his ravaging mouth. Logan's fingers fumbled as he worked his hands underneath her skirt urgently, pulling her panties to the side and stroking her slick folds with his smooth fingertips. “Oh yes, fuck, yes,” she murmured under her breath as she arched against him, her entire body shivering with sensation.

Logan sucked at her collarbone as she frantically tried to unzip his pants. She unbuckled his belt and pushed the denim off of his hips before cupping his face and kissing him fiercely. He pulled his cock through the opening of his boxers and nudged the lips of her pussy apart as he sucked on her tongue.

She groaned when, with one powerful thrust of his hips, he was completely buried in her quivering flesh, his cock throbbing with the beat of his heart. He withdrew slowly, pinching her nipples through the starched cotton of her demure button-down and the lace of her brassiere. He paused to gaze at her lovely face, bathed in moonlight in the dark bathroom.

Almost as if she could hear his doubt, Veronica opened her eyes and reached for his hand, entwining their fingers. Words, whispered softly, but distinctly, and for his ears alone, at once affirmed his faith in her, and made the wholly tortuous evening worthwhile.

“You're the one I trust, Logan,” Veronica whispered, her voice as silky as a dream. “You're the one I need.”

Her head fell back again and she groaned lustily as Logan started ramming his cock into her in short, sharp strokes. They were both primed for an explosion, and when Logan began frantically humping her against the ancient door, a startled cry was torn from her throat. She writhed against him in a frenzy as she climaxed, desperate to prolong the sensation as long as possible. With a few final thrusts, Logan came with a cracked sob of pleasure, muffled against the tender skin of her throat. He continued to pump his hips even after his release, lost in the rhythm. Veronica threaded her fingers through his hair, her nails brushing against his scalp tantalizingly.

She was gazing at him adoringly, but his heart was still aching, and he couldn't bear to look. Logan gently set her on her feet, cleaning himself off before tugging his pants up and zipping the fly. Veronica adjusted her underwear as Logan slumped to the tiled floor, his back against the cabinets. Veronica lowered herself into his lap and entwined their fingers.

“They're wrong about you, Logan,” she whispered, and he stared back at her dazedly. “Just because college isn't your thing doesn't mean you're not smart. Fuck them.” She nuzzled the crook of his neck with her nose, kissing his earlobe and suckling into her mouth.

And in that moment, Logan realized why she'd pounced on him here, of all places. Giving him back his power, his esteem as her lover, here, right under their noses. He held her closer.

“I hate the way he looks at you,” Logan muttered, and she laughed.

“Now you know how my dad feels,” she joked.

His only response was a woefully grave expression.

“He means nothing to me,” Veronica assured, wrapping her fingers around the back of his neck. “You know you're the only one that matters to me, right?”

Logan averted his eyes, staring at the mildewed edge of the shower curtain that hung limply across the bathtub. “You've never said it,” he pointed out, trying his hardest not to sound like a petulant child.

“Oh, Logan,” Veronica breathed, as if suddenly aware that the months of silence had taken their toll on him. His eyes flickered to her face, which was alight with comprehension. She buried her face against his shoulder. “I love you.”

He tightened his arms around her immediately, a choked moan erupting as he held her tight. “You deserve someone better than me.”

“And you deserve a swift kick to the head. But life isn't fair, Logan,” Veronica answered solemnly. “And we don't always get what we deserve.”

“Be serious,” he chuffed.

“I am,” she tilted his chin up until their eyes met and locked. She smiled beatifically. “Besides, I don't need a smart boyfriend...I've got a bad boyfriend.” And then she winked.

Logan huffed out a laugh, ducking his head again.

“If you were smart, I couldn't keep you barefoot an' pregnant and in the kitchen, chained to the stove,” she explained, grinning. Logan squeezed her hard and gazed into her eyes, seeing a depth of emotion that made him breathless. He was the romantic and she was the realist, but in that moment when their roles had been reversed, he'd been devastated. How could someone as brilliant as Veronica ever love a dumb chump like him?

“I'm tired, Logan,” Veronica confessed, her head dropping to his chest. “Take me home?”

She stood up, pulling Logan to his feet, and he gathered her under his arm, kissing the top of her head. Together, they slowly made their way downstairs and slipped into the parlour. Silently, Logan helped Veronica into her coat and gently wrapped her scarf around her neck. He shrugged into his own jacket and his hand fell to the small of her back as they headed for the front door.

Logan ducked his head to speak to her quietly. “Do you want to tell your friends 'goodbye'?”

Veronica shook her head and smiled softly. “I'll see them Monday.”

As they reached the foyer, John spotted them from across the room and made a beeline straight for them.

“Incoming,” Logan murmured, his posture stiffening.

“Leaving so soon?” John boomed, unable to hide his disappointment at the prospect.

Veronica wrapped her arm around Logan's lower back. “Yes, we're going home to spend the weekend with my dad. Logan and I are moving in together.”

Logan snapped to attention. He had been begging Veronica for weeks to move in with him, but she had always playfully skirted the issue, insisting it was too soon.

“...we have to deliver the heartbreaking news to him in person,” Veronica continued, her smile incandescent. “He barely survived when I told him I wanted to disengage the chastity belt.”

John's face had fallen dramatically. He stepped forward to claim a goodbye hug, but Veronica reached for his hand and squeezed it instead. “I'll see you Monday!”

“Bye,” he answered, disheartened.

Logan guided her out onto the porch, closing the door behind them. He swept her into his arms and kissed her passionately, his fingers tangling into her hair.

“I love you, baby,” he murmured a moment later, laying sweet kisses across the apples of her cheeks.

“Home?” she asked breathlessly, and he nodded eagerly.

Taking her hand, they stepped off the porch into the sweet clear midnight.

finis




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[info]afrocurl
2006-08-18 04:25 am UTC (link)
This is a really vivid and accurate idea of what could happen if LV were in an established relationship without Logan being in college. I'm going to say that all liberal arts students have the potential to be arrogant assholes when it comes to those not of the same breed, so Logan's general problems with this party ran very true to me.

The idea of Veronica wanting to make Logan feel empowered again after hearing all of the snide comments was really tender, and really sexy at the same time. I think it shows how much you have L and V in tune with each other to get this situation done right.

Another lovely installment. Hopefully more of these will follow.

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[info]taken_with_you
2006-08-20 10:02 pm UTC (link)
I ran into a lot of the liberal arts 'assholes' when I was in school, I wouldn't have mocked anyone that wasn't in college, but I definitely looked down on them. It takes a lot of growing up to overcome that prejudice.

Thanks for the feedback!
ML

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[info]sinoftheday
2006-08-18 04:30 am UTC (link)
Yay part 3!

This was so sweet. Veronica for once actually reassuring Logan and not letting him put himself out there and then leave him hanging.

Poor Logan thought... I loved this part: Logan averted his eyes, staring at the mildewed edge of the shower curtain that hung limply across the bathtub. “You've never said it,” he pointed out, trying his hardest not to sound like a petulant child.

and this cause it you know it made Logan happy: Veronica wrapped her arm around Logan's lower back. “Yes, we're going home to spend the weekend with my dad. Logan and I are moving in together.”

Logan snapped to attention. He had been begging Veronica for weeks to move in with him, but she had always playfully skirted the issue, insisting it was too soon.


Yes! She tells pretensious!asshole that she and Logan are moving into together and points out that she has sex with Logan right to his face. Take that jerk!

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[info]taken_with_you
2006-08-20 10:04 pm UTC (link)
Yes! She tells pretensious!asshole that she and Logan are moving into together and points out that she has sex with Logan right to his face. Take that jerk!

Since she was agressive and take-charge with Logan in the bathroom, I really wanted her to be passive-agressive with John when she told him to back off.

Thank you baby for the feedback. :-D
S

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[info]rindee
2006-08-18 04:49 am UTC (link)
I love this for so many reasons, and I may try to list them all, but the thing I most love about this is the warmth and passion and emotional depth between Logan and Veronica. I love that she uses their physical relationship to communicate with Logan, because she understands not only his jealousy of John, but more importantly, that her "intellectual" world causes him to feel insecure and inadequate. And I love that she gets it, realizes how he's feeling before he tells her. And, of course, I adore the way she "reassures" him.

So, the other things I really enjoyed: the description of the house - I could see it in my head; that Logan managed to control his temper and not make a scene, even though I think he would have been justified; and, I love these two parts in particular.

Almost as if she could hear his doubt, Veronica opened her eyes and reached for his hand, entwining their fingers. Words, whispered softly, but distinctly, and for his ears alone, at once affirmed his faith in her, and made the wholly tortuous evening worthwhile.

“You're the one I trust, Logan,” Veronica whispered, her voice as silky as a dream. “You're the one I need.”

So beautifully done - and it's about time Veronica put her brains to good use on Logan's behalf.

And this, too: “I hate the way he looks at you,” Logan muttered, and she laughed.

“Now you know how my dad feels,” she joked.

This is so insightful, and I like that Veronica makes it a joke, that she's true to her character and doesn't get all schmoopy even though, in a minute, she's going to tell him she loves him.

Really wonderful.



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[info]taken_with_you
2006-08-20 10:06 pm UTC (link)
You are the feedback queen and I am the lazy layabout who doesn't deserve to breathe your air. :-/

Thank you for telling me all of your favorite parts, it made my day. :-D I just like knowing what *worked.*

*dances* *toodles off to write part 4*

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[info]rindee
2006-08-21 05:43 am UTC (link)
You know, I really don't leave fb all that often any more - certainly not like this.... Where's part 4 already??!! Lazy &*6%

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[info]ziebra
2006-08-18 04:55 am UTC (link)
Awe... that was really sweet and heart warming. I love how you showed how much they cared for eachother, with Logan keeping his cool and Veronica opening up and coming to his aid. And I loved when she asked him to taker her home.

How far into school is this, still Freshman year? And the students are that jerky? What A-holes. You got the stereotypical scene down tho... ahh, the refined elegance of pretention.

I liked the discription of the handeling of the coats. It was a nice detial and also spoke volumes as to the level of their relationship, not to mention reinforcing the cold, winter? setting. I felt like I was there, in the foyer, ready to warm myself by the fire.

I have to admit, I was looking forward to more....smut ... on the level of the first chapter (there has been such a lack of *good* NC-17 L/V lately) but this was also really good. I shall have to contain myself...

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[info]taken_with_you
2006-08-20 10:09 pm UTC (link)
How far into school is this, still Freshman year?

I actually intended it to be ambiguous, but somewhere between Freshman-Sophomore year, definitely some time has passed, L/V have mellowed into their relationship, become more comfortable.

And the students are that jerky? What A-holes.

Liberal arts schools seem to be the worst for pretension, although usually not so overt. Lots of petty backbiting, however. :-/

Chapter 4 will be longer, and I promise, more smutty. :-D

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[info]berry_hearts
2006-08-18 06:08 am UTC (link)
i love your writing so much it's not funny.
this fic is good and long in need of an update!

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[info]taken_with_you
2006-08-20 10:10 pm UTC (link)
Thank you very much! I'll try not to be so long in between updates.

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[info]the_musical
2006-08-18 07:10 am UTC (link)
so i meandered over here tonight hoping for a late night update and i was rewarded handsomely.

this story continues to get more amazing. i like that here is a story where logan does keep his temper in check, and veronica gets to reassure him in a way that is true to character and hot to read.

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[info]taken_with_you
2006-08-20 10:12 pm UTC (link)
i like that here is a story where logan does keep his temper in check, and veronica gets to reassure him in a way that is true to character and hot to read.

I get tired of reading stories where Logan is an arrogant dick that can't hold his temper. He put up with Aaron beating him for years, and despite his sniping at Duncan and Veronica, he handled himself very well for a spurned boyfriend.

I envisioned this scene playing out with Logan being resigned to spend the night feeling inadequate, but doing it because Veronica had put herself out being nice to his friends the week before, etc. It's all about give and take, these silly relationships. ;-)

Thanks for the feedback!
ML

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[info]la623
2006-08-18 08:20 am UTC (link)
Awwwww...this was so sweet! I loved it! :)

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[info]taken_with_you
2006-08-20 10:12 pm UTC (link)
Thanks, sweetie!

ML

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[info]pegm81484
2006-08-18 12:36 pm UTC (link)
AWWWWW, could I love you more right now? I don't think so!!!

I actually read this late last night, but was way too tired to read it. Thank you so much for posting and for having Veronica finally say I love you.

I think it was really great that Veronica knew exactly what Logan needed her to do and say to make him feel better. Plus, I could totally see Veronica never actually answering Logan's question to move in and then just saying it to a third party before telling him.

Ok so now that you segued that they are going to be living together, bring on the 24/7 smutathon lol!!!

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[info]taken_with_you
2006-08-20 10:14 pm UTC (link)
AWWWWW, could I love you more right now?

Well, you *COULD*, I suppose. I do need an elegant pair of diamond studs...

Plus, I could totally see Veronica never actually answering Logan's question to move in and then just saying it to a third party before telling him.

Thanks for that! I'm so glad you noticed. :-D

Appreciate the feedback, darlin', as always.

ML

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[info]sowell
2006-08-18 01:33 pm UTC (link)
Ok, I just read the whole series (NOT a good idea at work, btw. Talk about distraction) and it kicks ass. But I think I like this part the best so far. You're a really great writer! I love romantic smut. Yay.

I could see the party REALLY vividly. Man, that's totally who Veronica's going to end up being friends with in college. Until one of them does something shady and she has to open up a can of whoop-ass. And Logan feeling left out with the private joke nickname and all insecure, and aw...

Parts I particularly loved:

He draped Veronica's coat over her purse, which he nestled into the crook of an armchair, and then tucked his own coat around hers protectively.
Because it's so perfect that if she's not there to protect he'd use the coat as a stand-in.

And in that moment, Logan realized why she'd pounced on him here, of all places. Giving him back his power, his esteem as her lover, here, right under their noses. He held her closer.
And the entire exchange that follows it when she tells him she loves him. eep. If only Veronica were that perceptive about Logan on the show. Grr.

And this,
Taking her hand, they stepped off the porch into the sweet clear midnight.
Because it's so hopeful and such a perfect last line. Aw. That was a happy start to my day.

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[info]taken_with_you
2006-08-20 10:19 pm UTC (link)
You're a really great writer! I love romantic smut. Yay.

Thank you! And me too! Though it's not "true to life," I try not to write much angst. It's my personal philosophy that real life can be shitty, and I read fanfic to escape, thus happy endings are mandatory, etc. :-D *NUDGE NUDGE KID THINGS NUDGE NUDGE*

If only Veronica were that perceptive about Logan on the show. Grr.

I rilly rilly want Veronica to grow up some this year. Being kick-ass is fine and good, but she's got to realize eventually that Logan's going to be the closest thing to true love that she's ever going to get. I mean...how many other guys would wait an entire year to get her back and then not even do the I TOLD YOU SO dance? Um, how about none? LOL.

But knowing how anti-Logan KB is, RT will prolly write him into a cocaine ring or prostitution business so that the audience will hate him and V can dump him and blah blah... GRRRR. *bares teeth*

So glad I could brighten your day. *bats eyelashes*
Sask

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[info]perfect__weapon
2006-08-18 01:58 pm UTC (link)
Aw. I loved this chapter.
Not only was it extrememly hot (fans self) but it was sweet.
I loved the way Veronica reasurred Logan and it was just freaking perfect.

"He barely survived when I told him I wanted to disengage the chastity belt.”

Brillant line haha.

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[info]taken_with_you
2006-08-20 10:20 pm UTC (link)
Thanks for the feedback! I love knowing your favorite lines!

'Preciate the feedback. :-D
ML

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[info]rowanceleste
2006-08-18 03:04 pm UTC (link)
Great chapter! I could see the pretentious assholes that Veronica goes to school with not understanding what she sees in Logan if he didn't go to college. They'd automatically assume she was with him because he was rich or the sex was fantastic. I was somewhat surprised that Veronica actually considered pretentious people to be her friends though, but I loved her reaction to their belittling of Logan. Sex in 'public' and she finally told Logan she loves him and she'll move in with him not only because she does love him and wants to but because she knows he needs to feel important in her life.

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[info]taken_with_you
2006-08-20 10:24 pm UTC (link)
I could see the pretentious assholes that Veronica goes to school with not understanding what she sees in Logan if he didn't go to college. They'd automatically assume she was with him because he was rich or the sex was fantastic.

*hides face in shame* I was one of the pretentious assholes, and I know I would have made that assumption had one of my friends been dating a "townie."

I was somewhat surprised that Veronica actually considered pretentious people to be her friends though, but I loved her reaction to their belittling of Logan.

The key is, though...they don't think of themselves as pretentious assholes. I think the faux-intellectualism would attract Veronica in the beginning because she didn't really have that kind of camaraderie (other than Mac, kind of) in HS. I think it would probably take her a bit to settle in and find her "crowd."

Thank you for the great feedback! I really love knowing it made you think--

Sask

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[info]candlewaxdreams
2006-08-18 04:24 pm UTC (link)
You finally updated!! I'm glad that they're starting to have to confront real-life issues instead of just having sex all the time (even though that's fun too). I really liked this part:

“He means nothing to me,” Veronica assured, wrapping her fingers around the back of his neck. “You know you're the only one that matters to me, right?”

Logan averted his eyes, staring at the mildewed edge of the shower curtain that hung limply across the bathtub. “You've never said it,” he pointed out, trying his hardest not to sound like a petulant child.

“Oh, Logan,” Veronica breathed, as if suddenly aware that the months of silence had taken their toll on him. His eyes flickered to her face, which was alight with comprehension. She buried her face against his shoulder. “I love you.”


I was wondering if Veronica was *ever* going to actually say "I love you" to Logan. It's obvious how she feels about him, but I understand where Logan's insecurity is coming from, since she's never said it. He needs to be reminded that someone in the world actually loves him and cares about his well-being. I liked the small detail of the mildewed shower curtain too. That was a nice touch.

Also liked this:

“They're wrong about you, Logan,” she whispered, and he stared back at her dazedly. “Just because college isn't your thing doesn't mean you're not smart. Fuck them.” She nuzzled the crook of his neck with her nose, kissing his earlobe and suckling into her mouth.

And in that moment, Logan realized why she'd pounced on him here, of all places. Giving him back his power, his esteem as her lover, here, right under their noses. He held her closer.


I am glad that Veronica told Logan she thinks he's smart even if he's not in college, because he *is* smart. I was really annoyed that those are the kinds of people Veronica is making friends with though. She has never been the pretentious type, and I can't see her choosing to spend time with intellectuals. It's important for Logan to know that Veronica feels that way about him.

I had an inner squee moment when she told John that she and Logan were moving in together. I can't wait to see them in their new domestic bliss! I don't want them to fight all the time, but I really want their issues to continue to be addressed.

Cookies and kisses for you :-)

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[info]taken_with_you
2006-08-20 10:28 pm UTC (link)
I'm glad that they're starting to have to confront real-life issues instead of just having sex all the time (even though that's fun too).

Get ready for more, and a little angst...because it's coming... *rubs hands together evilly*

Thanks for letting me know your favorite parts. Like I told [info]rowanceleste, I could see Veronica floundering a bit to find her crowd once she reaches college. Because she was a loner/outcast, she never really got to have the kind of discourse with other incredibly intelligent students, and I think she would gravitate towards that in the beginning.

I hopefully will have pt 4 ready soon! Thanks for the great feedback, as always. :-D

S

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[info]anglichanka
2006-08-18 05:57 pm UTC (link)
Yay, update! All too short, but oh so sweet. I love vulnerable, feling-insignificant, Logan so very much. I also really liked the detail about Veronica feeling comfortable enough to consume alcohol at parties again. I wonder if the VM writers will reference the ATTD incident (the actual drugging by drink, not just the rape) in S3, if Veronica attends college parties.

And I like the John character. Might he make a return appearance?

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[info]taken_with_you
2006-08-20 10:30 pm UTC (link)
I wonder if the VM writers will reference the ATTD incident (the actual drugging by drink, not just the rape) in S3, if Veronica attends college parties.

Meeee toooo. I really want her to have to deal with the fallout of her rape this year. They glossed over it throughout S2 because turns out it was perfect!Duncan and not!rapebutromanticallovemaking *barf* and Veronica never "dealt" with it on-screen. I almost want to see her pushing Logan away at first because she can't handle sexual contact, I think that would be very realistic, and a way to build the tension because they can't immediately hop in the sack together.

Thanks for your great feedback!
Love,
S

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[info]love_girl_18
2006-08-18 06:24 pm UTC (link)
When I saw part three I fricken almost fell out of my chair!!!!!!!!!
I am so in love with you! Brillant work. Ur just to awesome!

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[info]taken_with_you
2006-08-20 10:31 pm UTC (link)
Awww, thank you. :-D
ML

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[info]rejeneration
2006-08-18 07:30 pm UTC (link)
Oh. So. Good.

Every single part of this. I don't know how I missed it, but I’ve read it completely, so you’re going to get this really long post about all three parts! Luck you!

Part One

She yanked the denim off his legs in one easy motion, and then reached for his boxers, feeling the length of his erection through the jersey cotton.

I’m in love with this sentence. Can you be “in love” with sentences? If so, I am.

It’s interesting, I’m really not one for the use of ‘pussy’ when it comes to erotica... but every place you’ve used it, I can’t find one fault! That’s a feat, really.

“Listening?” he raised a coy eyebrow, almost smirking.

“Torturing myself,” she said quietly.

Great dialogue!

"Do it, fuck me with your mouth." And as soon as the words left her lips, she couldn't believe she had said them.

Oof, I almost died right there. X|

Part Two

I want to go to the club and finger you while you sit in my lap.

Umm, yes please.

“Sometimes I can’t fucking believe you're mine, Veronica, y’know that?” he whispered, but it seemed it was more a general wonderment than a comment directed at her.

I think that’s exactly the way he’d feel. Mostly. When she wasn’t fucking around with his head. ;)

The anal sex? Extremely well written! That's not easy to write without losing... the connectivity (or the passion or the flow or the ... the list goes on). It was perfect. The intensity was breathtaking.

except to Veronica, they were sweet everythings.

Awww! –nods-

Part Three

I loved his little bits of jealousy and the way you have him walk away from the scene with her and John. And I love that other people are questioning his “abilities.”

At some point I was revived, from my previous deadening... but then you went and did this and killed me – again:

“You're the one I trust, Logan,” Veronica whispered, her voice as silky as a dream. “You're the one I need.”

Her head fell back again and she groaned lustily as Logan started ramming his cock into her in short, sharp strokes. They were both primed for an explosion, and when Logan began frantically humping her against the ancient door, a startled cry was torn from her throat. She writhed against him in a frenzy as she climaxed, desperate to prolong the sensation as long as possible. With a few final thrusts, Logan came with a cracked sob of pleasure, muffled against the tender skin of her throat. He continued to pump his hips even after his release, lost in the rhythm. Veronica threaded her fingers through his hair, her nails brushing against his scalp tantalizingly.


I really love how you had Veronica reassure him. I'm a sucker for that kind of thing and I wish Rob would write a little more tenderness into her that way. She doesn't do it enough, IMHO.

“They're wrong about you, Logan,” she whispered, and he stared back at her dazedly. “Just because college isn't your thing doesn't mean you're not smart. Fuck them.” She nuzzled the crook of his neck with her nose, kissing his earlobe and suckling into her mouth.

Amen! Fuck ‘em.

Just... fantastic! Can’t say enough good things. Hmm, maybe I’ve said too many? Is there such a thing? I dunno.

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[info]taken_with_you
2006-08-20 10:42 pm UTC (link)
I’m in love with this sentence. Can you be “in love” with sentences? If so, I am.

OHhhhh, I *guess* I'll let you be in love with something I wrote... :-P *G*

“Torturing myself,” she said quietly.

Great dialogue!


I actually don't love this, upon re-read. I do think she would have listened through the door, torturing herself, but I don't think she would have admitted it. :-/ Ah, well.

“Sometimes I can’t fucking believe you're mine, Veronica, y’know that?” he whispered, but it seemed it was more a general wonderment than a comment directed at her.

I think that’s exactly the way he’d feel. Mostly.


I do, too! That's the way I think a lot of people feel with their true-loves. Like, 'how did I ever get this lucky?' Aww...but I'm a romantic at heart.

I really love how you had Veronica reassure him. I'm a sucker for that kind of thing and I wish Rob would write a little more tenderness into her that way. She doesn't do it enough, IMHO.

I do hope Veronica softens a bit with age, realizes Logan's not going anywhere...After all, wasn't it she who said, the hero is the one who stays, and the villian is the one that splits? *coughs*Duncan*coughs*

I'm a sucker for the lovey-dovery stuff, too. *le sigh*

Thank you for the wonderful, generous, lovely feedback. It means more than you know!

Sask

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[info]smiles1_9
2006-08-18 08:41 pm UTC (link)
Yeah, updates!! I love ethis story so much! This was probably my favorite chapter, sure the sex was a little bit tamer, but I like the closeness that we get to see between the two of them. It's about time that Veronica sees Logan's vulnerabilities and is able to let down her gaurd and tell him she loves him. We've seen so much of Veronica's insecurities it's nice to see that side from Logan as well. And they're moving in together, yeah!

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[info]taken_with_you
2006-08-20 10:44 pm UTC (link)
This was probably my favorite chapter, sure the sex was a little bit tamer, but I like the closeness that we get to see between the two of them.

OMG, but it was up against the door! That automatically makes it teh hot. :-P

Thanks for the feedback...
ML

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[info]sweetumms33
2006-08-18 09:35 pm UTC (link)
I don't think there is a story of yours that I didn't love, or find mind-numblingly hott. I adore this series, I love your Logan and Veronica, and I really like this chapter. The two of them fit together, its just hard for everyone else to get it. Please please keep writing, your getting me through my summer

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[info]taken_with_you
2006-08-20 10:43 pm UTC (link)
I will try to save you from a smut-less summer. :-D

Thanks for the feedback, darlin'
ML

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[info]lapdogdesign
2006-08-18 11:22 pm UTC (link)
I'll keep my comments to a minimum, since it appears that others have taken my MM crown this time. LOL.

First off, PANTIES! Pushed to the side. Guh...Oh baby, you know what I like!

Logan, looking for a place to lean...rowr.

I just realized this today, but it's like things have come full circle here from the Pilot - Logan is the outsider, the outcast, while Veronica is accepted and included by everyone.

It got my irish up when those literati assholes were bashing my boy. Good for V for realizing it and reaffirming him. Fuck them, indeed.

Favorite part (among many little gems throughout this chapter):
Veronica wrapped her arm around Logan's lower back. “Yes, we're going home to spend the weekend with my dad. Logan and I are moving in together.”

Logan snapped to attention. He had been begging Veronica for weeks to move in with him, but she had always playfully skirted the issue, insisting it was too soon.

“...we have to deliver the heartbreaking news to him in person,” Veronica continued, her smile incandescent. “He barely survived when I told him I wanted to disengage the chastity belt.”

The chastity belt comment cracked me up, but V telling John they were moving in together (a not-so-subtle 'back off bucko') in front of Logan was awesome.

As someone else said, you are the master of the romantic porn. Can't wait for your library smut! Wheeee!

Guess I can't do short comments, huh? *face palm*

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[info]taken_with_you
2006-08-20 10:52 pm UTC (link)
I'll keep my comments to a minimum, since it appears that others have taken my MM crown this time.

Half a page is a minimum? *dies* Don't take it laying down! Reclaim your Margaret Mitchell crown, by God!

I just realized this today, but it's like things have come full circle here from the Pilot - Logan is the outsider, the outcast, while Veronica is accepted and included by everyone.

And you were the only one to have noticed... That's why I had him sit back and not say anything, or play the jealous boyfriend card. I wanted him to let Veronica have her moment in the sun. *sighs*

Guess I can't do short comments, huh? *face palm*

Nope! And herrrrre's your icon! ------------->

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[info]douladiva
2006-08-19 01:40 pm UTC (link)
Yummy! Public sex is good sex. Thanks for continuing on, even if it is as a loner.
This chapter was delicious and developed their relationship even further. My favorite moment was when Logan wrapped her scarf around her neck. So sweet!
I will be happily looking forward to coming chapters.

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[info]taken_with_you
2006-08-20 10:54 pm UTC (link)
Public sex is good sex.

*nods*...though I would say ANY sex (with Logan) is good sex. ;-)

My favorite moment was when Logan wrapped her scarf around her neck. So sweet!

Awww, thank you! I love knowing your favorite parts!

Thanks for the wonderful feedback!

Love,
ML

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[info]moustrich
2006-08-21 09:25 pm UTC (link)
I loved this chapter. I love jealous Logan and that Veronica said she was moving in with Logan in front of her classmate like that. I dislike all her classmates that judged Logan without getting to know him. Oh yea and the sex was very hot. Great chapter. I can’t wait to read more.

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[info]taken_with_you
2006-08-26 07:12 pm UTC (link)
Thanks so much for the great feedback!

Love,
ML

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[info]bklyangel
2006-12-01 02:00 am UTC (link)
Any chance we'll be getting an update?

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[info]taken_with_you
2006-12-01 04:04 pm UTC (link)
I hope to have this updated in a week--two at the most. Thank you for being so patient. It's harder to do when my partner-in-crime is MIA. :-( So sorry--

Love,
ML

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So far...
[info]earth2mars
2007-02-12 08:49 am UTC (link)
I think this is my favorite chapter. It is. There's so much to love here. For example...

Logan didn't know how to boil an egg, much less deliver freshly-prepared chicken cannelloni So funny.

Veronica shot Logan an apologetic smile over her shoulder, and Logan gave her a small, resigned wave. He wasn't sure when this whole private-joke-nickname shit started, but he sure as hell wasn't happy about it.
Loved that, such a simple little thing (that nickname business) but I can easily see how it would irritate Logan.

Logan weaved his way through the door, brushing past Beverly, John's younger sister and the source of the gossip...She abruptly closed her mouth when he sauntered past, but he nailed her with a hard glare. Great bits of gossip here--felt real. I loved his response.

“I hate the way he looks at you,” Logan muttered, and she laughed.

“Now you know how my dad feels,” she joked.

That--that little exchange there--that was classic VM. LOVE LOVE LOVE it.

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Re: So far...
[info]taken_with_you
2007-02-13 07:22 pm UTC (link)
I think this is my favorite chapter.

...It is less smutty than the others, but the last two have been the chapters I wrote by myself. I think the other two just have a different *tone*. I still *love* Chapter One, but the later chapters definitely are more "me".

Thank you so much, again, for so much time and attention. I feel so speshul. :D

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[info]starxd_sparrow
2007-02-13 06:53 am UTC (link)
Not nearly as smutty as the previous chapters, but I loved this the most. Your attention to detail is what sets you apart, ML. Gorgeous, vivid, vibrant detail.

Several small kegs sat on the rear patio, the TAs in the Political Science department had a friendly competition over who made the best home brew. Logan helped himself to a cup of a raspberry wheat beer and went to find a bare piece of wall to slouch against until Veronica was ready to leave.
Raspberry wheat beer just screams pretension! I mean, I enjoy a good microbrew from time to time, but at a party? Ha! Liberal hoohah. And Logan and The Wall Lean? Effing epic hotness, right there!

“And you deserve a swift kick to the head. But life isn't fair, Logan,” Veronica answered solemnly. “And we don't always get what we deserve.”
Hee... love it! This is the Veronica we've all been missing!

One more to go! *scampers a little sadly*

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[info]taken_with_you
2007-02-13 07:25 pm UTC (link)
Not nearly as smutty as the previous chapters, but I loved this the most. ...You're not the only one to have said that, I've concluded this is perhaps because the chapter was all "me" vs the earlier chapters where I had a co-collaborator and they just have a different tone.

Raspberry wheat beer just screams pretension! I mean, I enjoy a good microbrew from time to time, but at a party?

Dude, doesn't it? And I can just see all these Liberal Arts dickheads milling around pretending it's wonderful when...in reality, it's disgusting. Fruit + Beer = NOT A GOOD IDEA. *facepalm*

Thanks so much for all the time and attention. I feel so speshul. :D

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[info]worldwouldend
2007-11-05 08:11 am UTC (link)
I'm very late to the VM fic party, but I've been following recs and found myself reading several of your stories, all of which are lovely! You manage to convey such sweetness and love for and between Logan and Veronica while not lacking in substance. But this part of this series in particular is so perfect that I could just read it over and over. I could completely see this happening if Logan hadn't gone to college. And while the sex was hot, the best part for me was Veronica soothing Logan's insecurities and making him see how very awesome he is.

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